Monday, September 13, 2010
A time I showed Courage.
One day I showed Courage when I was in america their were Hornets.They had a nest in a tree and we were playing with water guns then aciendently someone shot the nest and every bug was getting out and chasing us until they were able to bites us or stinng us but we were like that for about 5 minutes and then they decided that we go back in the house and find some stuff to kill them but I just chose get some food from the fridge and throw it out their and then get a bucket and throw water on it But when we attempted we were to frightended until I decided that I should go their with a shovel and long sleeved shirt same with pants and when I did that it worked but It felt good hitting them and throwing the water and watching them go down the drain but a few of them were still alive and they bite me it felt like getting a shot for aid but I still killed them but I kept on saying Im not afraid and kind of mocking them for some thing they couldn't do.
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ReplyDeleteTyler, I liked the part about how you got a long sleeved shirt and long pants to help keep your body covered from the wasps (who would've thought of that?!), and especially the part where you got a shovel and tried to whack them with it (though I highly recommend using bug spray). But, their were a few mispelled words and a few organisation problems in your context. The information was good, though it took me a bit of a while to understand what you were writing, and if you can, try to improve on this, it'll help a lot.
ReplyDeleteHi Tyler I liked the time when you showed courage. The paragraph was a little short and you had some spelling incorrect. I liked that you were so brave to fight those bugs and this is a really good story. Just like Gerald I also recommend some bug spray instead of using a shovel. I think that if you will just make it a little bit longer it would be perfect but this is still a very good job.
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ReplyDeleteHi Tyler
ReplyDeleteI really liked the time you showed courage. When I was reading your paragraph I saw some incorrect spelling. Like Gerald said I liked the way how you got a long sleeved shirt and long pants to help keep your body covered from the wasps. Like Gard and Gerald said insted of using a shovle use bug spray. I really liked your story but if you could make your paragraph a little bit longer it would be perfect. Next time you could but some more details about how you felt of doing that?